Bedtime Tale
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My First Poem
Dragons in the dungeon deep
Hold my children in their keep
Bigger than all life itself
The tallest one, he's King Ralph
Nasty eyes and teeth and nails
He's so bad he drips green scales
Little boy eyes wide with fear
Beg of me, "Don't stop here!"
Bravely, the dragons we will fend
Until their bedtime comes again
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Thank-you, Susan.
I wrote this a very long time ago....only poem I've ever written.
Glad you liked it.
Shirley
Great shirley!
Almost as good and Horton and Hoo. I hear they're still looking for another Dr. Seus.
Have a great Day
lol....think I have a ways to go first, but thank-you.
Shirley, you should write more poems now that you've returned to writing. there are so many formats and freeforms. Write like you talk to your children. I read your hub about selling poetry and then came here. Poems can be stories. Poets can be spokespersons of the masses. Cheers with no fears.
Sligobay - thank-you for your guidance and words of encouragement. I hadn't thought of poets being spokespersons of the masses....what a wonderful concept.
I also likes the 'Cheers with no fears'.....so perfect, thx.
What a cute poem! :)
Thank-you, Michelle. It's as close to poetry as I get, I'm afraid - well, except for Edgar Allen Poe's, The Raven.
The President of your fan club - has failed!
He should have been pushing your poetry!
:)
Thumbs up from me!
ProCW
Thank-you, Pro. I think though, that Wordsworth and Longfellow are not in any danger from the competition. :)
YOU HAVE NOT FAILED! You are the very best fanclub president ever!!!
I love this poem. It's very creative. The pictures of the dragons are very cute and are a nice touch, as well..
Thank-you, Kiki! I think the dragons are cute, too. You can see why though, I don't write poetry as a rule. :)
Very good. But what happened to the cat that got run over by a VW bug? I also see you have a hubber score of 100. Way to Go!!!!!
That is an incredible compliment coming from you, SirD! The king of poetry. The cat that got run over by a VW bug - that's a whole different hub. :) Re the 100 score, I get excited every time I see it! That's been something I've looked forward to since I signed up. It always put a smile on my face.
Thanks for dropping in, SirDent!
You are a good poet - no doubt about that...
Moulik Mistry, you are too kind! Thank-you.
So cute. Thank you. I really enjoyed it.
Thanks, RG. I'll bet real poets shudder when they read it. :-)
Now how did I miss this little gem? Love it! You really should do more of these. I'll bet a whole collection of dragon poems would be a big hit!
Oh, RMR! I'm groaning with embarrassment, although not as much now as when I published it. Glad you like it. Hadn't thought of a collection of dragon poems but I like the idea.
Thanks, RMR!
Shirley, that poem stands on its own, but I think it could also be a great beginning to a children's book . . .get yourself an illustrator, a few more stanzas, dragon book!
Hi Shirley, I like your bedtime poem very much. :)
I loved your bedtime tale. I am a 60 year old kid!
susanzheng 3 years ago
Hi, Shirley.
I like your bedtime tale. It's interesting.